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| Jul 25, 2007 12:18 pm |
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re: Profile critique #20 - Paul Steven |
Walter Paul Bebirian
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Paul -
your photograph presentation is good - -
since you mention family protraits in your presentation though -
I feel that you might improve the presentation by adding at least one (if not more) family portrait samples in there as well -
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although your running in the marathon is a commendable activity -
the image in my mind of you doing events is cut short by my minds questioning as to whether you photograph the events yourself or if you have have a staff of photographers covering these assignments (due to the image of you running placed in the image mix)
I think it is very important for the customer to know who is the photographer especially if you are doing let's say a wedding or a pr event since who will be present and how they will do the work or cover the event is key in these types of assignments -
Also -
I find that the harsh black text later on down the page is a bit difficult to read -
if there is a way to tone things down a bit - I would try that -
just my opinions of course -
and I also realize -
all of your presentation slant and focus is determined by what it is that you want to get across -
You do seem to be encouraging people to be networking (that seems obvious) but to what end or exactly why are you focusing so heavily on that here in the Virtual Handshake arena and on your main RYZE page -
I am not sure what the motivation is exactly -
I know you have a great deal of energy -
but I am wondering if you are putting that energy to the best possible use for yourself and your business -
All the best to you in all that you do!
thank you!
Walter
http://www.575488trillion.com
http://bebirianart.com
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