Constructive critiques:

1. The "Haves" is practically the first thing people read about you, and it's in RED. Make the most of it. Right now you're using it to tell one particular feature of your business. I would use it to tell more about YOU. Haves: "Passion and enthusiasm for meeting and connecting people and encouraging others to do the same." Something like that.

2. The text area is a mess. Considering the two different font faces, the bold text, the underlines (that aren't hyperlinks), the underlines that are, the red italics, etc., I counted EIGHT different typeface combinations there. AND... they're all jumbled together. That's simply too many, plus the underlines that aren't hyperlinks are confusing. Break it up and organize it. Section headers would help. Also, generally, stuff reads better in shorter lines -- you might consider making a 2-column table down there.

3. I wouldn't use the shorthand with a legend at the bottom -- just say the words. You don't want to use jargon when you talk to newbies, even if you explain the jargon.

Scott Allen
NEW! Revenue River - Multiple streams of internet income . . . without the hype

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